Revising for Final Draft

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Introduction--The hookMake sure your introduction starts creatively and captures your audience's attention. Try one of the following techniques:

Interesting question
Shocking statement
Hypothetical situation
Famous quote
“All the news that ’s fit to print,” the motto of the New York Times since 1896, plays with the word fit, asserting that a news story must be newsworthy and must not exceed the limits of the printed page.


Background & thesisAfter the hook, information about what the controversy is surrounding the issue should be provided. This information should lead into the thesis, which is the last sentence of the introduction.

It should be all of the following:
a statement (NOT a question),
arguable (someone should be able to disagree ) ,
clear & specific (the reader should understand what you will be proven in the body paragraphs)

The increase in online news consumption, however, challenges both meanings of the word fit, allowing producers and consumers alike to rethink who decides which topics are worth covering and how extensive that coverage should be. Any cultural shift usually means that something is lost, but in this case there are clear gains.The shift from print to online news provides unprecedented opportunities for readers to become more engaged with the news, to hold journalists accountable, and to participate as producers, not simply as consumers.


Supporting ParagraphsSupporting paragraphs should provide enough information to be convincing.

Look at content only--ideas, evidence and explanation only. (Be sure to provide your thesis first in parenthesis.)


Introducing quotes and parenthetical citations. (Supporting paragraphs again)Look at supporting paragraphs one more time. Make sure each quote is introduced and followed by parenthetical citations.

Even summary of information from sources should have parenthetical citations.
Guided by journalism’s code of ethics—accuracy, objectivity, and fairness—print news reporters have gathered and delivered stories according to what editors decide is fit for their readers. Except for op-ed pages and letters to the editor, print news has traditionally had a one-sided relationship with its readers. The print news media’s reputation for objective reporting has been held up as “a stop sign” for readers, sending a clear message that no further inquiry is necessary (Weinberger). With the rise of the Internet, however, this model has been criticized by journalists such as Dan Gillmor, founder of the Center for Citizen Media, who argues that traditional print journalism treats “news as a lecture,” whereas online news is “more of a conversation” (xxiv). Print news arrives on the doorstep every morning as a fully formed lecture, a product created without participation from its readership. By contrast, online news invites readers to participate in a collaborative process—to question and even help produce the content.


Counterargument & RebuttalA good counterargument & rebuttal paragraph should have each of the following parts:

1.Topic sentence
2. Expert /evidence
5. Refutation
1 Critics argue that the reason why some terminally ill patients wish to commit suicide is nothing more than melancholia. Patients suffering terminal illness might tend to be negative, hopeless, and depressed. 2 In “When Patients Request Assistance with Suicide,” Dr. Michael Maskin, an associate professor of clinical psychiatry at Columbia-Presbyterian Medical Center in New York, argues that in many cases, dying patients’ thinking is simply occupied by negative reactions to their critical condition (2). 3 In other words, most of the reasons why terminally ill patients request doctors and/or loved ones to assist them in committing suicide might be caused by certain problems such as hopelessness, because there is no effective treatment, anxiety over expensive medical bills, and regret for being a burden to their families (Maskin 2). 4 For this reason, opponents argue that the terminally ill patient needs psychotherapy, and that his wish to end his life should never be considered. 5 Though it is true that psychotherapy might help the terminally ill patient confirm his decision, and that it is not a medical doctor’s job to help patients end their lives, it is, however, ultimately the patient’s decision and his life to end. No person or law should prevent or punish loved ones who assist in that choice.

(1.Topic-opposing idea 2.Expert/Evidence 3.Explanation 4.Concession 5.Refutation/Rebuttal)


ConclusionDoes the last paragraph do all of the following:

1) restate thesis

2) sum up main points

3) end with a powerful statement
The Internet has enabled consumers to participate in a new way in reading, questioning, interpreting, and reporting the news. Decisions about appropriate content and coverage are no longer exclusively in the hands of news editors. Ordinary citizens now have a meaningful voice in the conversation—a hand in deciding what ’s “fit to print.” Some skeptics worry about the apparent free-for-all and loss of tradition. But the expanding definition of news provides opportunities for consumers to be more engaged with events in their communities, their nations, and the world.
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